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Blog #17 April 27, 2010

Filed under: Uncategorized — ragandeborahcxvp @ 2:08 am

I had a variety of fears at the beginning of the semester.  First and foremost, I do not consider myself a good writer.  I always have trouble writing and getting my paper to flow and be grammar free.  Although, for me to become a teacher, I need to get over my fear of writing because in this major, I always have to write papers.  I remembered this throughout this course and I knew if I could make it through this class, I would learn a lot about writing and be less fearful.  I was right.  I learned a large amount in this class just like I did in 121.  My future goal as a writer and researcher is to keep practicing because in my profession, I need to be a researcher and a writer.

My biggest fear in this class would probably be when I had to have someone else read my paper.  Many times I attempt to revise my paper by myself because I am embarrassed to have anyone else read it.  Although, I took it to the writing center and the man who read it understood everything and he really enjoyed it.  This made me feel great and made me want to finish the course with an excellent paper.  Another proud moment was when I took about 4 hours and revised my entire paper by turning it into APA and shortening it.  I made it just the way I wanted to and now I am not scared to have others read it.

After this course, I believe I will always be able to easily understand each section of the research writing process.  Also, I will not be afraid to pick up my formatting book if I ever need to in later classes.  Lastly, the main thing that will stick with me throughout this course is how important revising and editing are to the writing process.  I never knew how much peer constructive critisism helps.  Also, I never knew how well I could go through a paper and revise it if I just take the time.  Once again, a lot was learned.

 

Blog #16 April 20, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 8:53 pm

The assignment that helped me most and taught me the most was when I had to research each section of the research process.  It was helpful that I had to critically read and summarize several websites for each topic.  Because of this assignment, each student had several websites to reference when it was our turn to write a research paper.  Also, we were required to send out the website we found to each of our group members.  This gave us even more articles to reference.  This assignment also helped us practice researching and citing.

The most helpful feedback I got on my paper was surprisingly when I went to the writing center.  The man working there was extremely into my topic and gave me a lot of great suggestions and what he personally would want to learn more about my topic.  At first, I was extremely scared to share my paper with anyone because I thought it was not good enough and I was embarrassed.  I thought no one would understand the point I was trying to make.  So, when I went to the writing center and my helper really enjoyed my paper and was interested in it, it made me feel great about my work and made me want to work a little harder because I now knew there were people out there really wanting to learn about my topic.

The most challenging part while writing my research paper was the introduction.  It was hard to start to get the ball rolling on the paper.  I was not sure exactly what I wanted to add into the introduction without even doing my results yet.  After I did the introduction, everything else seemed to get easier and easier.  I also got a chance to go back several times to the introduction part of my essay and revise it to make it better and more relevant to the rest of my paper.  The easiest part for me while writing my draft was writing the results.  It was fun to collect my results and it was easy to place them into my paper.  It was interesting to me to see what results I received back from my participants.  They were all very willing to help me and I was glad to receive their feedback.

During this process, I believe I became a much stronger reviser of my own paper and peer’s papers too.  I am so glad I feel this way after this class because revision is crucial in every paper that I write.  The part of the draft that I feel like I did most strongly is was honestly my hook.  I thought I used a great idea to get the reader’s attention and I did a good job explaining what they were going to be reading about.

 

Blog #15 March 30, 2010

Filed under: Uncategorized — ragandeborahcxvp @ 11:43 pm

From the peer review project the biggest thing I learn was not to be scared to give your paper to someone to read.  The editing process is very important and I always try to do it on my own because I am embarrassed to give it to anyone else to read.  My peer reviewer helped me with different ideas for my paper and explained to me what to change to make it more appealing and easier for the reader to read.  That is the whole purpose of writing a research paper to make your paper understandable so, you can get your research across to the people that will be reading it.  Also, I learned a lot about how to edit.  Whenever I had to edit before in class, I normally just mainly looked for grammatical mistakes because no one explained to me that just your thoughts can help the writer.  I found that to be way more beneficial than just checking for grammar.  Also, it is also easier on the editer.  They are just writing down their thoughts while reading the paper and for the writer, this is extremely helpful.

For my research project, this editing process helped a lot.  I realized that during my paper, my transitions were not always good and I repeat myself a large amount.  I would not be able to understand the problems with my paper if someone did not point out my flaws.  It is hard to point out your own flaws because you are the one writing the paper.  I learned that the revision and editing process is crucial if you want to create a decent piece of writing.

 

Blog #14 March 29, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 12:09 am

Results

Writing Up Research:  Results.  Language Center.  2003.  Web. 28 March 2010.

Purpose of Results Section:

-Make results meaningful to reader

-Results can be placed in graphs, tables, diagrams or just be written text

-If there is a table or graph in the results section, the writer must describe it in written text.

Organization of Results Section:

-Presenting all results then giving a discussion

-Presenting part of results than giving a discussion (repeat)

When preparing a results section, if there is a reference to a figure or appendix, it is best to put that in parenthesis.  It is also important not to keep repeating information in the results section.  There is an example of a results section on this website.

Shuttleworth, Martyn.  “Writing a Results Section.”  Experiment-Resources.com.  2009.  Web. 28 March 2010.

The information I found about results of a research paper is called Writing a Results Section.  It began by stating that a results section is a straightforward commentary on exactly what the researcher find.  It is easy to include too much unessecary detail.  The results section should provide a link to the discussion section leaving open questions to be answered.  It talks about two ways to write a research results section.  First, write the results and continue into the discussion section.  The second way is to present some results then a discussion and repeat the process.  You also must include the negative results.  Lastly, you can include your raw data into an appendix section if your afraid you results did not cover enough information.

Discussion

The Structure, Format, Content and Style of a Journal Style Scientific Paper.  How to Write a Paper in Journal Style and Format.  September 25, 2008.  Web. 28 March 2010.

Function:

-Interpret results from what was already known to explain new understanding

-Always connect to introduction by questions and hypotheses

-Questions to answer

     -Do the results provide answers for the hypotheses in the introduction?

     -Do the results align with what other research has shown?

     -Are their flaws in your research?

     -What is our new understanding of the research topic?

     -What would be the next step in the study?

Style:

-Be concise and clear

-Use of first person may distract reader

Approach:

-Address each experiment sequenced just like the results section

-Do not restate the results section

-Use ”bridge sentences” to remind the readers about the results section if need be

-Must relate work to other studies

-Do not introduce new results in the discussion section

Writing a Results and Discussion.  Psych.hanover.edu.  Web. 28 March 2010.

I found an article called Writing a Results and Discussion to explain to me about how to write a discussion section of a research paper.  To begin, in a discussion section, relate the results right back to the hypotheses.  First, provide a brief summary of the introduction and results section.  The writer should relate these two sections.  If the results did not support the hypotheses, restate why it may not have.  Discuss what problems may have occurred during the primary research that could have affected the results.  Also, talk about anything that has been discovered in the results that is important to the paper.  Lastly, discuss the broader significance of the results.  Also, where it might lead the research process of this certain topic.

Conclusion

Conclusions.  Handouts and Links.  1998-2007.  Web. 28 March 2010.

Strategies for effective conclusions:

-To write a conclusion, make sure to write down what is important to your topic (play “so what” game)

-Return to themes discussed in introduction

-Include summary of main points of paper but do not repeat things

-Provide insight or quotation to excite reader

-Propose a solution to an issue or ideas for further study of the topic

-To end, point to broader ideas

Strategies to avoid while writing the conclusion:

-Avoid overused phrases (in conclusion, in summary etc.)

-Do not state thesis for very first time

-Do not introduce new ideas

-Do not end with same exact thesis statement as at the beginning

- Do not include evidence

There are 4 examples on this website that show what are ineffective conclusions.

Samuels, Holly.  “Writing a Conclusion.”  CRLS Research Guide.  November 2009.  Web. 28 March 2010.

The article I chose to read about conclusions is called Writing a Conclusion.  It states that a conclusion is the last paragraph or part in the research paper.  It makes the reader feel like the writing is complete.  The writer is a more reliable author when they have a conclusion that sums up and supports their thesis.  The writer needs to restate their thesis and summarize the main points of their evidence for their conclusion.  This website gives and examples of a conclusion.

 

Blog #13 March 22, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 9:18 pm

I put my paper together by mainly looking at the last paragraph of each section.  I want to make sure I have good transitional paragraphs.  I do not want my paper to be choppy.  In my paper, I needed to review the first two sections after I wrote my methodoloy.  In the beginning, I was going to research both male dancers and men who do not dance.  After having a meeting with Marlen, I figured out that that idea was going to be too much for such a short period of time.  Now, I am focusing on just the non-dancing male’s perspective.  So, the beginning of my paper, I had hypothesis about male dancer’s experiences and I was going to answer some of them through my primary research.  I had to sift through my paper and take that section out and put in more information I wanted to learn about the non-dancing male’s perspective. 

I still want to edit my paper by adding more information from secondary research that I have found on non-dancing male’s perspectives of men who do dance.  My paper has slightly shifted and that idea is the most important in my paper now and it needs to be better researched.  I also need to add more information to my paper to give it length.  Lastly, I plan to go to the writing center now that I created my methods section and before i do my conclusions and discussion section.  I want them to find any grammatical errors.  Also, I want them to give me feedback about my writing style and general and what information is not important in my paper and should be taken out.

 

Blog #12 March 18, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 12:58 am

To begin, my research participants are going to be non-dancers that are males.  I first wanted to research male dancers and non-dancers that are males but then I realized that was answering more questions than I need for this specific research.  I want to figure out why men feel threatened by male dancers and feel the need that they need to ridicule them. 

I think it is going to be easy to find my participants.  I already thought of a few people that have trouble with the idea of men dancing that I may want to interview.  I will state in my methodology section that I chose men who believe other men should not dance.  I want around 3 participants to try and understand their thinking.  If I had more than a fifteen page report, I may want to figure out more people to research. 

The only danger in my report is that men will reveal their identity about not believing in male dancing.  I want to protect their identity by not using their name and just using their ideas.  I just want to figure out how I should set up my methods section.  I will look at examples online to see how others write their methods section.

 

Blog #11 March 15, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 1:31 pm

“Method and Research Design.”  Language Center.  Web 15 March 2010.

Purpose

-Two main questions

  • How was data collected
  • How was it analyzed

-Method affects result

  • Helps reader know validity of results

-There should be reasons to why the writer chose method

-Reader wants to know data is accepted n field of study

-Methods must be appropriate objectives

-Discuss problems that were anticipated

-Other researchers may want to replicate method

Common Problems

-Irrelevant detail

-unnecessary explanation of basic procedures

-problem blindness

Overview

-Intro

  • how objectives will be achieved

-Lit. Review

  • Review of previous work relating to methodology/ results

-Method

  • How results were acheived

-Results and discussion

-Conclusions

Some Examples of Different Types of Research

-analysis

-case study

-comparison

-correlation-prediction

-evaluation

-design demonstration

-survey questionaire

-status

-theory construction

-trend analysis

Writing Own Method Section

-PURPOSE

-keep notes

  • what you did
  • why you did it
  • what happened

-Remember audience

-Avoid using “I”

-Be consistent with verb tense

Baum, Josh.  “How to Write a Research Methodology.”  eHow.  1999-2010.  Web. 15 March 2010.

To begin, the writer needs to be thorough but concise. 

INSTRUCTIONS

1.  Write brief introduction of the methodology section.

This should include the goals and any challenges that may stand in the way.

This should be about a single paragraph.

2. Write a summary of the methodology used.  Keep lesser details out of this section.

3. The extended methodology is next.  This should include the data collection methods. 

4. At the end of the extended methodology write the data analysis. 

5.Lastly, it is important to proofread and edit work.

Tips and Warnings

-Write in past tense

-Use specific style and composition guidelines given by the instructor

 

Blog #10 March 2, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 4:09 am
CRITERIA 5 4 3 2 1 0 Comments
  1. Formatting – MLA/APA headers, titles, indentation, etc.
          X It is not set up in any specific style.
  1. Introduction – sufficiently forecasted the remainder of the essay
        X   There was not really a hook although, the last sentence caught my attention.
  1. Conclusion – sufficiently wrapped up the author’s thoughts; connected to intro.
          X The conclusion is inconclusive.  He is going to finish it in his next blog.
  1. In-text Citations – at least 2 and properly formatted
          X I do not even see any in text citations.
  1. Works Cited/References – only work actually cited in the paper is included; properly formatted.
          X I do not see any works cited or references.
  1. Grammar/Mechanics – language choice; punctuation; spelling, etc.
        X   He capitalized and put a period at the end of the sentences.  Although, everything else made no sense
  1. Pre- & Post-writing paragraphs – did the author sufficiently describe goals and how to meet them? Did author sufficiently explain how goals were met?
          X Did he even have goals?
  1. Flow – transitions between paragraphs; all sentences in a paragraph related; no run-on or fragmented sentences.
          X Transitions were horrible.  Too many paranthesis and very choppy.
  1. Hooked and maintained reader interest.
      X     I wanted to keep reading just to figure out where he was trying to go…which was no where.
  1. Genre – Met the needs of the intended genre.
        X   He talked about shooting rampages the whole time.
TOTAL = 5 Add’l comments:
 

Blog #9 February 22, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 3:59 am

Embodying Difference:  Issues in Dance and Cultural Studies

P1-Explains, in detail, a man and a woman dancing the tango.

P2-Talks about how most people would recognize the tango but less would use it in their scholarly work.

P3-Dance is undervalued.

P4-It talks about if people studied the wide variety of dance they would be able to better understand how social identities are formed through body movement.  We can move away from the bias of North American and British dance if we understood this.

P5-Most cultural studies are object based.  Dancing is most commonly known as a past time or entertainment.  If it is elevated to be called an “art form”, mostly white women are imagined.  This shows why such studies are important.

P6-Race and gender are mainly looked at by physicality and not mentality.

P7-Detailed analysis is necessary to study body movement.

P8-Cultural analysts have little interest in dance. 

Movement Style and Meaning

P9-Wants to talk about different dance styles and their different meaning.

P10-Movement style is an important distinction between social groups and is mainly learned in one’s own community.  Movement can be read as a signal for many things.  (gender, race, ethnics, class, national identities, sexual identity, age, illness or health)

P11-Dance is only a part of movement studies.

P12-When movement is called dance, it may be learned informally in the community or formally in an institution. 

P13-Dance can how us what is acceptable and specific attitudes toward the body of different cultures.

P14-The last paragraph could provide researchers with further questions much larger in scale.

P15-In history, the waltz was seen as too sexually dangerous.

P16-Nineteenth century dance had posters showing the proper and improper ways of dancing.

P17-The posture and gestures of dancing showed the distinction between different classes.

P18-How the class and gender of the 19th century in dance pushed it to change over time is what this paragraph is about.

Appropriate/Transmission/Migration of Dance Styles

P19-Many different dance styles change from cultural groups and over time.

P20-History of tango goes back to the dock sides of Buenos Aires and to the salons of Paris.

P21-Dance shows the construction and negotiation of race, gender, class and nationality.

P22-Talks about how certain types of dance can change due to gender or class. (Pelvis dancing)

P23-Dances were changed to be more appropriate.

P24-Culture changes the dance to be more suited to them.

P25-Different cultures borrow and refashion dance.  The meanings change as well.

Dialects of Cultural Transmission

P26-Slavery affected African and European cultural practices.

P27-Slavery, mixed Africans into different cultures.  This resulted in new religious practices, male and female relationships and artistic practices.

P28-Slavery may have created or remodeled cultures.

P29-Cultural specify means ethnic absolutism.

Identity, Style, and the Politics of Aesthetics

P30-Talks about difference between “black” dance and “white” dance.  Dance may be different because of a variety of things not just race.

P31-Racialized difference is looked at as white and non-white.

P32-Talks about dance moving from a subordinate to a dominant group.

P33-The view of dancing like “blacks” could change from culture to culture.

P34-Different dancers in different contexts, changed the styles of dance.  African American style in the U.S. changed many styles of dance.

P35-There was a huge influence on dance in North America due to black rap music.

P36-Black groups have a very percussive style and move the pelvic area a lot while dancing.

P37-Dance traditions originating in Europe usually show the torso as upright and the pelvic area barely moves.  In white groups, there is a toning down of that movement.

P38-Class and gender still are the main things that affect dance.

P39-The dancing style is now classified under more “youth” than just “black” culture.

P40-The Cosby Show, exhibits bilingualism, by being middle class and showing the audience “blackness”.

P41-Senegulese people began dancing “white” like and as they warmed up, they began dancing more risqué.  This showed the rural/urban tensions.

“Hot and Sexy Latin Dances”

P42-Significant overlap in Latin dance and black dancing.

P43-Latin dance is stereotyped sexy and fiery.

P44-In North America, both latins and blacks are said to have rhythm.

P45-The latin dance is a safe way to express sexuality in public.

P46-The latin dances sensual lure is what pulls non-latin people into dance.  Eventually these dances changed to become less sexual, more sensual and appropriate.

P47-The symbolism of dance sometimes becomes detached.

P48-Miranda, from Hollywood’s, Brazillianess soon became stereotyped as Latinness.

P49-The origins and meanings attached to Miranda’s outfits were lost in the middle class Northern America.

P50-Her image in the U.S., is now recirculated in the male “drag queen” idea of characters.

P51-The styles of dance become generalized as they transport from culture to culture.

P52-Our general ignoring of the meaning of different dances causes generalizations.

Theatrical Dance

P53-Theatrical dance is less likely to be changed through the media.

P54-Ballet can be mixed between European and Chinese cultures.

P55-Chinese ballet is different between American and European cultures in its syntax and choreography.

P56-The importation of ballet from china happened during the cultural revolution.

P57-other factors, such as foot binding, caused a decline in Chinese ballet.

P58-Chinese cultures showed their women as warriors dancing with swords so, America showed their dancers with guns.

P59-Now, there is more non narrative ballets.

P60-Chinese cultures are also generalized in North America like latin dance.

P61-Japanese dance is not a dance form that North America tries to adapt, this may be due to them being our competitors.

P62-Some rituals are set as timeless and magical.

P63-Thatrical dance styles do not always work from traditional styles.

P64-Some dance choreographers are served as a purpose or political statement.

Concluding Thoughts

P65-Takls about how they argued the continuing changes of form in dance.

P66-Also argued about how their should be an increase attention in body movement.

P67-To study movement it will require special tools.

P68-All movement is affected by a variety of things. (history, culture, gender, race, etc.)

1.  The introduction is more appealing and story like.  The lit review informs the reader about the author’s arguing points.

2.  It talked about a woman and a man doing the tango.  It made the reader want to understand why that was important to the research.

3.   a) The purpose was to persuade the reader why studying body movement is important and should be studied more.

      b) To show how dance is transported from different places and changed to fit that certain culture.

     c) What is the significance in studying bodily movement?

      d)Researched different famous dancers to show the generalization of dance.

     e) Body movements are adopted and changed by different cultures.

     f) The conclusion explained what the arguments were that they made in their article.

Work Cited:

Desmond, Jane C.  “Embodying Difference:  Issues in Dance and Cultural Studies.”  Cultural Critique (1993-1994):  33-63.  University of Minnesota Press.  Web. 8 Feb. 2010.

Dance Reveals Symmetry; Especially in Young Men

P1-Darwin was the first to state that dancing had a hand in courtship.  A persons bodily asymmetry is correlated with attractiveness.

P2-There is no study on dance quality with genetic quality.  The author used motion-capture technology to capture the complex movements of dance.  In 2004, in Jamaica, 183 human dancers were motion-captured.  Each individual danced to the same song in a minute at the same place.

P3-There were dancers described as asymmetrical and symmetrical.  The researchers studied the dancers elbow, wrist, knee, ankle, foot, and third, fourth and fifth digits.  Males recognizing the sex of the dancers was 62%, females were a little better at this task.

P4-Fathers less invested into their children than mothers produce females who are more selective in mate choice and males who are more invested in courtship.

P5-There is a significant effect of symmetry and sex.  Symmetrical males are considered better dancers than asymmetrical males.  Females symmetry only accounts for 23% of dance ability.

P6-Female evaluator of the dancers had a higher relative preference for symmetrical male dancers.

P7-They want to keep trying to figure out what the correlation is between different patterns of dance and the quality or different levels of symmetry of the dancer.

Methods

P8-Fluctuating asymmetry

       Morphometric measurements were collected for each dancer.

P9-Motion Capture

       Large sample of dancers were filmed with the same music, and same space.  Also, in front of the same group of  people.

P10-Stimuli Presentation

          Forty dance animations were selected to be studied.

P11-Statistical Analyses

         Tested primary hypothesis that symmetrical individuals are better dancers.

1. The introduction starts out with an interesting fact about the topic.  Then, it states the hypothesis and what will be discussed in the article.  The lit review is more formal and discusses all of the actions taken to provide for the article.

2. The attempt to hook the reader’s interest was by using an interesting fact about Darwin.

3. a)To show the correlation between dancers and symmetry.

     b)The importance is the attractiveness dealing with symmetry.

     c) Are dancers who show more summetry better dancers?

     d) Took measurements of dancers.  Used mortion-capture tools to view difficult techniques of dancers.  They used 40 out of the 183 dancers in the study.

    e)Females had more preference than males for symmetry in dancing.  Symmetrical dancers are technically not better dancers.

     f) It ends with a methods section whcih helpts the reader understand where the writer is recieving their information.

Work Cited:

Brown, William M.  “Dance Reveals Symmetry Especially in Young Men.”  Nature 438 (2005):  22-29.  Web. 8 Feb. 2010.

 

Blog #8 February 17, 2010

Filed under: ENGL 202 — ragandeborahcxvp @ 8:52 pm

Fleming, Grace.  “The Introductory Paragraph.”  About. com.  2010.  Web. Feb. 2010

The Author, Grace Fleming, is a respectable writer of The Introductory Paragraph.  She was a college advisor and admission counselor.  Now, she is currently working at Armstrong Atlantic State University and teaches classes such as Strategies for Success and University 101.  In this article, she writes about how an introduction is extremely important for a writer to remember.  The writer needs to hook their audience so they keep reading.

This article talks about how first sentences make all the difference in whether a reader will keep on reading.  This sentence must lead to a thesis, which is the main point of the paper.  This important sentence needs to hook the reader.  Anecdotes, quotes or trivial facts found through out the writer’s research are able to be used as hooks for their paper.  Examples of suprising facts, humor and quotations used for hooks are posted on this website.  When the first draft is done, the writer is to go back to the introduction and check the thesis to make sure it still works for the rest of their paper.  Then, they are to look at the first sentence again and make it more exciting.

The website I found dealing with introductions is called, Writing Introductions.  It states that the writer needs to spark the interest in the reader so they keep reading.  I am going to write a bulleted list of strategies that do work and do not work for writing introductions.

Strategies that work

     -write questions that will be answered in the rest of the text

     -unusual fact

     -descriptions of people or places

     -background information that will intrigue the reader

Strategies writers usually avoid

     -general information

     -announcing what you will do exactly in the rest of your paper

     -make promises you will not keep

In this website, there are also concrete examples of different introductions that could spark ideas.

Work Cited:

Writing Introductions.  University Writing Center.  May 2008.  Web. 17 Feb. 2010

 

 
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