Blog #13 March 22, 2010

I put my paper together by mainly looking at the last paragraph of each section.  I want to make sure I have good transitional paragraphs.  I do not want my paper to be choppy.  In my paper, I needed to review the first two sections after I wrote my methodoloy.  In the beginning, I was going to research both male dancers and men who do not dance.  After having a meeting with Marlen, I figured out that that idea was going to be too much for such a short period of time.  Now, I am focusing on just the non-dancing male’s perspective.  So, the beginning of my paper, I had hypothesis about male dancer’s experiences and I was going to answer some of them through my primary research.  I had to sift through my paper and take that section out and put in more information I wanted to learn about the non-dancing male’s perspective. 

I still want to edit my paper by adding more information from secondary research that I have found on non-dancing male’s perspectives of men who do dance.  My paper has slightly shifted and that idea is the most important in my paper now and it needs to be better researched.  I also need to add more information to my paper to give it length.  Lastly, I plan to go to the writing center now that I created my methods section and before i do my conclusions and discussion section.  I want them to find any grammatical errors.  Also, I want them to give me feedback about my writing style and general and what information is not important in my paper and should be taken out.

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